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Well, I've finally started working on the Pac-Man creepypasta I promised again. I had to re-write quite a bit of it, because it was so cliche-filled. Here's my work so far. Please excuse the spacing (damn Notepad.)

CRUISE ELROY
A creepypasta by Marguerite Richardson (Furbearingbrick)

About two years ago, just out of curiosity, I searched eBay for Dooney-Burke bags. It's the same
handbag my mom has, and she keeps talking about how expensive they are. I thought she was
exaggerating, until I saw the prices for new ones. "YIKES!" I said aloud. But then something caught
my eye-a $3 Dooney-Burke tote. I rolled my eyes, thinking it was yet another scam. Might as well see what kind of scam. I was surprised, the page looked like it had been put together by a Flash
proffessional. Also, the seller had actually put a YouTube video of herself modeling the bag. The
description promised a "surprise" would be included if I combined shipping with the only other item
she was selling, a somewhat overpriced pewter octopus pendant (Hobby Lobby sells them for $5, this one went for $7.) I *knew* there had to be a catch. Still, I was dying to know what this "surprise" was.

When the items arrived, I discovered that she had sent me a silver octopus pendant with ruby eyes
(at least, they looked like rubies) that looked nothing like the one that was advertised. Hm. Was
this a case of false advertising, or was this the "surprise" she mentioned? Either way, it looked
very nice.

As I took the bag out of the box, I noticed that it was unusually heavy-far too heavy to be paper
wadding. I opened it. Inside was a VHS tape. Oh, *this* must be the surprise. I took it out, and the
side label said "DO NOT AIR!" I was puzzled. I observed the front label.  It read "PROPERTY OF
HANNA-BARBERA (A Taft company)" and was emblazoned with the "Swirling Star" H-B logo. Okay, now I was *really* curious.

I took the bag to my room, and transferred all my belongings from my ratty old Wal-Mart shoulder
bag. Then, I took the tape to my parents' room and inserted it into the old VHS/DVD player. The
machine sputtered to life, and there was about 1 minute of blackness. Then, white lettering

appeared:
"DO NOT AIR
FOR SCREENING PURPOSES ONLY
(c) HANNA-BARBERA 1983"

This screen remained for 30 seconds, and then it faded into the Swirling Star logo from my youth.
Memories of Jetsons, Smurfs, and The Flintstone Kids rushed back to me. But then my enthusiasm was soured by the fact that the end note was sustained for an unusually long time. I never noticed how CREEPY it was until then.

The logo screen dissapeared and the intro for the second season of Pac-Man started. I quickly
noticed that Blinky was missing from the ghost monster line-up. This wasn't a simple erasure,
either; all the gags in the intro with the Ghost Monsters seemed to have been re-drawn by different
animators. Instead of the usual title card, there was a live-action background of a night sky to a
synth organ rendition of Bandinere, while the title, in white chroma-keyed letters - "CRUISE
ELROY"-zoomed in.

It cut to a shot of the Ghost House at night. The camera zoomed in on a window, and it cut to the
Ghost Monsters sitting around a fireplace. The fire was animated amazingly well; this stuff was way
too good for Hanna-Barbera's output at the time.
Inky was roasting marshmallows, Pinky was reading a magazine that said "PLAYBOO" on the cover (that made me chuckle), Clyde was playing chess with Sue, and Blinky was just staring off into space, or should I say into the fire. That part unsettled me a bit.

The camera then cut to the fire, and then transitioned to the fire dying down. It cut to the Ghost
Monsters again. All of them were heading upstairs, except for Blinky, who was fast asleep. Sue
nudged him. "Blinky, it's time to go to bed," she said. Blinky mumbled something, and rolled to his
side. Sue sighed, pulled a fur coat out of the closet, and placed it over him like a blanket. "Sweet
dreams", she said.

It cut to black again for five seconds. A creepy, raspy, whispering voice issued from the speakers.
"Blinkyyyyyy...Blinkyyyyy..." A pair of glowing yellow eyes gradually appeared on the screen. It cut
to Blinky waking up with a start and falling off the chaise, then getting up again "Blinkyyyyy..."
the voice continued. Blinky turned around and there was a large rectangular shape, covered in a
white sheet, that hadn't been there before. A faint yellow glow peeked from under the sheet. "There
you are. Don't be afraid little ghost, come closer...closer...just take off my cover and I can grant
you anything your heart desires..."

Blinky did so, revealing a mirror that looked like this:
(I don't have the drawing up yet, wait till it gets uploaded to Creepypasta Wiki)

That thing instilled a sense of great dread in me, for some reason. Something about it seemed
incredibly evil. Regardless, I kept watching. I wish I hadn't, now.

"That's better. Now, what is it you would like?"
"W-w-w-well," Blinky stammered, "I would like to be a little less c-c-cowardly."
"Are you sure this is what you want? Not power, riches, or women? Not even to be leader of the Ghost

Monsters?" The evil voice sounded a little dissapointed.
"Nope. I just want to stop being so su-scu-sca-frightened all the time."
"All right then. Ahem...IT IS DONE!!!" the voice thundered, and there was maniacal laughter. There

was a bright flash of light, and Blinky covered his eyes and it looked like he was in a strong wind.
When he uncovered them again, the mirror was gone.

There were five more seconds of blackness, with whispered chanting in an unknown language. White letters appeared on the screen: "THE NEXT DAY". It showed Blinky in the same position he had been in when Sue had put the fur coat on him. He woke up and gasped. "Hoo boy, what a nightmare!" he said.
The next three scenes were merely storyboard sketches with voiceovers, inidicating this episode was still quite unfinished. In the first, it shows Inky serving breakfast and the Ghost Monsters
gathered around the table.
PINKY: "Oh boy! I'm so hungry I could eat a Pac-Bear!"
CLYDE: "What's the matter, Blinky? You look like you've seen a gho...sorry, slip of the tongue. Heh
heh."
BLINKY: "Oh, it's nothing. Really."

The next storyboard-scene showed Sue answering a dial-phone. "OK, bye. Hey guys, finish up breakfast. Mezmaron has an assignment for us."
CLYDE: It's gonna make my day messin' up Pac-Man's day!

The third and final storyboard scene was in Mezmaron's lair.
CLYDE: What have ya got for us this time, boss?
MEZMARON: You ghost monsters are going to dump this experimental mind-control powder in the Pac-Land

Main Resevoir. If my calculations are correct, it will turn everone in Pac-Land into my slaves! If you don't foul things up again, that is.

The next scene was a pencil test, or as they used to call them, a liche reel. It showed Mezmaron reaching into his pocket and handing Clyde a bottle of fluid. "Oh, and don't forget the antidote. It'll keep you from falling under the effects of the powder. Now, get going!" Now fully colored and animated, the next scene was of Pac-Man in the Pac-Museum from "The Great Pac-Quake" and "The Pac-Mummy." He was standing next to a Pac-Person with a bushy grey moustache and wearing a graduate's cap and bifocals. Pac-Man said, "Let me get this straight, Professor Pac. You called Power Pellet Security to help find a missing *mirror*?" I realized this new character was brought in to promote the then-new game "Professor Pac-Man." "Not just any mirror, Pac-Man!" Professor Pac said. He had Grump's voice actor. "It's the evil  Mirror of the Jade Eye! Legend says that whoever looks into it gets thier fondest wish granted, but at a horrible price! We have to recover it and put it safely in storage!""Ehhhh, that's just an old story," said Pac-Man. "I don't believe in that mumbo-jumbo."

It then showed the Ghost Monsters approaching the Pac-Land Main Resevoir, with Pinky carrying a
large red barrel and Clyde holding a jug of green fluid. There were two Pac-People guarding the
entrance of the resevoir building. The ghosts hid in the bushes. It cut to under the shrubbery,
where Clyde was telling the others how to dispose of the guards. "Inky, Pinky, you chomp the guy on
the left. Sue and I will chomp the guy on the right. Blinky, you...Blinky?!" He was gone, and so was
the barrel.

Clyde looked toward the building. Blinky was rushing toward the door with the barrel lifted over his
head, screaming, with a manic look on his face. The guards went on thier patrol and lowered what
appeared to be ray guns. "Stop! No ghosts allowed!" they said in unison. The voice was of Lorenzo
Music (who also provided the voice of Super-Pac in the show.) Blinky didn't stop. Clyde leaving the
jug of antidote behind came from under the bushes and ran after him. "STOP, BLINKY! WHAT DO YOU
THINK YOU'RE DOING?!" Inky and Pinky followed, but Sue stayed in the bushes.

The left guard fired at Blinky, and a ray of purple light came from the weapon. It hit his shoulder,
and he dropped the barrel, yelling in pain and falling over. Pinky made a running dive and turned
into a huge catcher's mitt, catching the rolling barrel.
PINKY: Whew! That was close.
Inky chomped the guard on the right, accompanied by the show's "deflating" sound effect. BWEEEOOOW!
The remaining guard was standing over Blinky, his laser aimed at the red ghost's head.

It cut to a close-up shot of Blinky, who slowly turned to face him. His eyes opened. They were
bright yellow, and had no pupils. He scowled and uttered an inhuman growl. His mouth was now filled with huge, pointy teeth. The guard was terrified. "Oh...my...go..."
Blinky lunged at the guard and swiped at his face with long, sharp claws that hadn't been there before. Streaks of red appeared where the claws made impact. He then proceeded to bash the guard against a nearby rock repeatedly. The other ghosts looked on, thier jaws hanging open with
disbelief.

Sue finally emerged, grabbed Blinky from behind, and shook him. "STOP IT, BLINKY! STOP IT! STOP IT! PLEASE!!!" Blinky stopped, and his features returned to normal. "H-huh? What am I doing? OH MY
GOSH!" He let go of the dazed, bloodied Pac-Person and slowly backed away.

"Uh...I think we'd better leave," said Clyde. Police sirens blared in the distance. "Dang!" said Pinky. "The chomped  guard must have crawled away and called for help!" "C'mon fellas, let's tell Mez the bad news", said Clyde.

It went black again, and the chanting returned, this time slightly louder. "LATER THAT DAY"

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I'm Furbearingbrick, the artist formerly known as Laser Potato, and before THAT I was known as Electro Sun Dog. I'm nowhere near as prolific (nor, in my opinion, inspired) as I was in my Mac days. Sigh... anyway, please take a look at my Creepypasta Wiki profile, as long as you're here: [link]

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Wassap Fur?

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I noticed your CreepyPasta profile. Could you give me some helpful advice at working out the technical stuff at making a story page?

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Not much. Well, I'm going to re-orientation at Six Flags America, so I guess that's something.

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Hey there! Thanks for the fave. If you'll browse my gallery I'm sure you'll find even better stuff there. Take a look!

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Thanks so much for :+fav: one of my works :D
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